BA #10

I plan on revising my research paper by concentrating more on leading towards one side. I believe the use of technology has increased the rate of identity theft. Once I state why I think this and use my research to back it up then I believe I will be able to also argue the point. I am also going to need to break down and expand on my points a little more. I think that once I get more sources then the progress of the paper will speed up. I am going to need to clarify my thesis and state exactly my argument. Therefore, my new thesis sentence is Technology has had a negative effect on crimes and scams specifically identity theft. I also plan on changing my opening to make it more interesting.